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Mr. D.'s classroom adopted a superhero named "Romo".
Running
day and night from the evil hunting pair of vicious German Shepards
control by the scienticfic mad man, Dr. Phorpaws, Romo the wonder pup
was running out of ideas of where to hide. Soaring above through the
clear blue skies, Romo spotted an interesting pattern of tiny running
figurines. Upon closer examination with his super "Pena Lasik" eyesight,
Romo flew by the miniscule little humans. It was just as he had
suspected...it was a school of talented and intelligent school children.
Romo
remember what his dear Mom had once told him, "Puppy dear, look both
ways before flying across the street to a playground." Romo honored his
Mom's request and made a gentle landing on the playground. Mr. D.'s
students were running around excitedly, releasing high levels of stored
of energy, when all of a sudden a student noticed Romo sitting by the
bench.
The students stampeded across the playground toward
Romo,leaving behind a trail of lingering dust. Romo began speaking to
the children and asked them politely to take him to their leader!
Chloe
shouted, "That must be Mr. D.!" The students crowed around Romo with
strange puzzled looks since this was the first time they had ever
encountered a talking Chihuahua wearing a Sharyland shirt. "Make way,
make way," a frantic voice eminated from beyond the crowd. It was Mr. D.
who was also surprised to see Romo. Mr. D. asked Romo why he had
decided to make a grand entrance during recess instead of checking up
front and securing a proper hall pass from Ms. Diana? Romo stepped out
of his helmet and explained about the evil Dr. Phorpaws who was
trailing his every move.
Romo
explained that he was on a mission to find the missing bone stollen
from the SUE Exhibit. An innocent bystander by the name of Jordan
quickly alerted the proper authorities and Commissioner Martin sent for
Romo to head the investigation.
Mr.
D. was very impressed with Romo's explaination. "Our classroom will do
everything within their powers to protect you from Dr. Phorpaws and
provide a safe haven while you plan your strategy to locate the missing
fossil. Mr. D.'s class cheered with excitement, "Yyyyeeeaaahhhh!"
Stayed tuned regularly to follow the adventures of Romo, The Wonder Puppy. In the meantime,
please revise and edit any errors in this story. Bring me the revisions and you will be rewarded!
Fourth Grade Rocks!!!!